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ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Feb 23, 2014 2:35 am | |
| Dark, I'm thinking with the developing romance part, we need to change the course of it a bit in the story. So far, a romance seemed to instantly form with Gamba and Layla, and Var and Kyra, but I don't think it would suit Ammon as a character if he quickly formed any sort of relationship with Shebla, I think it would be good if we extended the romance part, and made the relationship more strained and tense. I am thinking that after the battle is over, Ammon should leave the Sunset Pride and start wandering around Ethiopia again, because Ammon is going to realize he's going soft, and he's going to try and get over it, because that's just his personality, and he won't like the fact that he's let Shebla into his heart, and permitted her to become so important to him. I was thinking to make him disappear for the most part for the rest of the current plot, so we can focus on Var and Kyra again, and how they have to go get the stone and defeat Dalmaa.
In a nutshell, we're kind of repeating ourselves with how quickly the character romance forms, and Ammon is starting to lose the mysterious aura surrounding his general personality, which we still need to retain for a bit. If we make him leave, and we have him do fine by himself, we can develop other characters a bit more, like how everyone reacts and thinks of Ammon when he leaves, and what happens when he finally shows up again. What I'm saying is that we should make Shebla doubt how much Ammon cares about her, and add a bit more internal emotional conflict. I also don't want Ammon to fully become a member of Sunset Pride until much, much later in the story, so he remains that sort of outcast that people know is lurking out there, but fear challenging or messing with him. I want it to be like Ammon is still extremely difficult to approach on any emotional topic, it's too easy right now. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Feb 23, 2014 8:08 pm | |
| Right. I was beginning to think it was starting to evolve rapidly as well. Though with Kamuzu gone Shebla will cling to whatever person left that is closest to her. So she's sought comfort in this event from Ammon. Also because she is terrified of Aziza and Kavis and they are probably the only things she is afraid of, other than losing the ones she cares about. But after she's done mourning, she won't seek as much.
That would be a good idea, though I'll admit, I was greatly enjoying Ammon being such a large part in the story and having so many parts with him. But I'll anticipate his arrival back into the plots later.
Var and Kyra will have to leave soon. And probably take a third member, I was planning for Taru, with them. As well as have them have to have Saber tag along. Because for one, they'll need his expertise on spirit messages. Secondly, I'd like to develop him more and involve him in more plots. I also have a few events planned for him later.
And I also planned for when the current battle is over, Kavis and Cyla are both taken captive by Sunset Pride.
Not to spoil things, but I was going to spin things up a bit and have Cyla turn on Moonrise and forget her evil ways. I thought it might be interesting to do something with her and Coglon, whether it be just friends or a romance or even a rivalry, whether you choose.
The captivity will also allow good progression between Kavis and Subira. As he tries to figure out what he wants and what he's going to do. But I need to keep the image that he's extremely calm and mysterious. He's very sinister and silent. And his calmness is extremely creepy and unnatural. And I've adapted a Hannibal Lecture trait that Kavis is so calm, that even his pulse doesn't change when he's killing someone. He feels zero pity, zero sorrow, and zero anger for any of his victims and he will very well kill any single person if it is necessary to his cause, for that's what he's been raised to do. And he sees the world in much different way than most people. It's important he has a certain ominous feel to him. And I think almost all of the characters should be intimidated by him, or at least extremely creeped out or frightened by him. I want him to have a certain bone-chilling, hair-raising feel, because he may very well be one of the most powerful characters in Pride Days as of current. I need to put a lot of emphasis on his immense shadowy personality.
And another thing, I had an idea. I've never really seen you work with an evil character in Pride Days. I've seen you do flashbacks and such like with Ammon's father, but I think it would be interesting to see you create a villain. Just thought I'd swing by you.
I also think Aziza needs to get more development. Though I have her backstory thoroughly planned out, there's not really a way as of current for the main characters to see. And it's very important for them to know. Right now Aziza's coming off to me as a common villain, and I really want her to stand out. Aziza needs to have the image of an extremely wicked and bloodthirsty person and pose such a large threat with her forces that it is unbearable for the main characters to let her live.
Another backstory that they need to know resides with Magir, who I think we've forgotten about.
So, there's a lot to do. I've got quite a bit planned out for Jali and Sira's cubs which will be interesting. But I can't reveal anything until after the stone plot, because it will involve something that happens along there. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Feb 23, 2014 10:43 pm | |
| Well, Ammon is actually going to be tied a bit into the Warring Prides (That's what I called it) Plot. I am also currently planning on making a villain, I just didn't see the point in introducing one right now. You see, I've been planning on another evil spiritual thing separate from Dalmaa to be behind it the unrest, although it's not a single great entity we're dealing with, not yet. It's more of a group of them, called the Ix, because that's a mysterious name nobody can really figure out. Basically, it's a collection of evil spirits unrelated to Dalmaa that, like him, were banished in ancient times to the mortal world. The Ix entered a deep slumber because they were put under a powerful sealing spell by an ancient group of warriors, made up from different kinds of creatures, not just lions, that rose up to stop them. I was going to say the night of the lunar eclipse, when all the fighting happened and spirits were manifesting in the mortal world, the wild fluctuations of energy were enough to break the seal that were keeping them asleep, as it hadn't been strong enough to be permanent, and had been weakening over the ages. The Ix, which consist of a whole gigantic hoard of evil spirits, are led by nine main spirits that are much more powerful than the others, and during the rest of the Stone Plot, they will be influencing two incredibly powerful prides, one belonging to lions, the other to cheetahs, to go to war with each other, which will disturb the natural balance, where they are located. The Ix's goal currently is to cause as much chaos as possible, as they feed on negative energy, which makes them stronger, and after they cause one war, they will try to move on and cause more death and destruction. That's not their whole plan, that part will be revealed later, but it's pretty warped and twisted, quite fitting, really.
In a nutshell, I'm going to slowly ease in the Warring Prides Plot, by having strange, subtle occurrences happen with characters that aren't important to the Stone Plot, but are to the next one. Both the Moonrise Pride and Sunset Pride will begin to notice strange, subtle things. Lesser creatures, like birds or small rodents, will on occasion start acting very strangely, going into these eerie fits that are like seizures, before suddenly disappearing off to somewhere, and if the animal in question is capable of speech, it won't talk at all when someone tries to make it speak. People will immediately begin to suspect possession, but the creatures will flee before they can remove whatever is possessing them. The Ix, also, manifest in small, darting shadows, for the moment, so people will on rare occasions see little movements out of the corners of their eyes. That's all, the Ix aren't going to speak or anything, but it'll kind of set the stage for everything.
Shadow will return to the story when the Moonrise Pride is no longer holding Sunset Pride under siege, and will be very important when the plot comes in, but I intend for Ammon to actually become a bit of the leading hero/mentor for a time in the beginning of the Warring Prides Plot. As he travels, he's going to find the most evidence of the strange, disturbing occurrences the Ix are causing, and will learn a few techniques of how to deal with these dark spirits without offending the spirits still in the spirit world in the process, like how to drive them out of a creature without killing it, as well as their identity as the Ix, though he won't know their true intentions and goals. He will also gain a slight change in appearance, because he's going to have a run-in with another group of spirits that woke up from their slumber on Earth. These spirits, who will call themselves the Xi (Because they regard themselves as the opposite of the Ix, hah!) are some of the spirits of the warriors who originally defeated the Ix, and voluntarily sealed themselves away and stayed in the mortal world, so that whenever the seal on the Ix was broken, they would be able to aid the next people to fight the Ix, and hopefully, seal the evil spirits for good. Ammon's change in appearance will be due to the fact that these spirits, before being forced into the spirit world by higher forces, will impart to him their powers that they used to battle the Ix, which will allow him to see the dark spirits as they truly are, like a weaker, alternate form of the Sight that doesn't tell the future or prophesies, and charge him, as the one who found their resting place, with the great mission of finding the next warriors to fight the Ix, and train them. Ammon's change in appearance will have less to do with making him physically stronger, but much to do with allowing his blows to hit non-mortal targets, as well as making it so that people have undeniable proof that he's actually on the mission, because when he returns to Sunset Pride looking for the warriors that will be marked as destined to fight the Ix, they won't believe him unless there's actual proof he was touched by the Xi.
As for Coglon and his relationship with Cyla, Coglon's not much the romantic sort, he's kind of cold and unemotional, and honest to the point of brutality, as he has no filter on what he says and won't restrain the truth in fear of hurting someone's feelings, so if a romance ever happens, it won't be until long into the future, though a friendship could happen, and eventually, the romance comes out of it. If a romance ever happens, it'll probably be the talk of the Pride, because it'll be something people wouldn't be sure if it was really there or not, but they'd enjoy baffling themselves with that concept. Coglon, in fact, has an important role in the Warring Prides Plot, as well, and will go on a pilgrimage to a special location with Shadow, where Coglon will lose his normal eyesight, in exchange for a new kind of sight that will allow him to see the life-energy of any living thing, turning him into an Askari, which is sometimes also called a Blinded Warrior, because Coglon will always know where his foes are, and where everything is, but he won't be able to see them in a traditional sense, and even if they were completely silent, he could find them without failing. He will retain everything, even his ability to read, because he will even be able to see a bit of energy where there is microscopic life on surfaces, although he will no longer be able to distinguish colors, and will therefore be colorblind, not that such a thing is important for him. He will serve a special purpose fighting the Ix with this unique sight, and it was one of Shadow's missions to change him in such a way. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Tue Feb 25, 2014 11:36 pm | |
| I like these ideas. I look forward to the new plot.
I at first planned for Saber to find this new cub on the journey to Kenya. But I decided I'd like Osiris to resemble him so I made this little twist. So I guess I'll spill some of my own plans for some of the cubs.
The group of cubs that are being born will be a close-knit group. They will be friends with each other. I'm sure Jali's cubs and Gamba's cubs will be very close, and if Kyra and Var have any by then, then that also applies.
Thema, Jali's daughter will be a very sweet girl. At first. Saber raises Osiris to look at Jali as an evil king, with his talk of what he and Star had done. And Osiris is your casual "bad kid" that Thema thinks is "cool". So she ends up hanging out with him, Jali fearing for her daughter. And that's as much as I'll reveal on that. Because I want to surprise people with the events that will take place.
But I do want to mention that after our plot lines with Moonrise and then Wading Prides, we should cut down on villains for a small portion of the story. We can focus on perhaps a famine or maybe a widespread disease. Afterwards we can resume evil dudes. Osiris won't exactly be evil, because of how complex I'm going to make him. But he will have a certain shadiness that separates him from the common good guys.
Kadei, Jali's son, will probably stick with Kakra, Atsu, and Omari. And as a young prince, he will be extremely popular among others in the pride his age. He will be busy during some days for prince training.
I have several secret twists I've had planned for... ages, that I'm going to bring about. Several of which I'm excited for. Others will just be shocking, and a few sad.
Kamuzu's death was one of these twists that I couldn't just hold any longer. And I thought it was an ideal time to draw that in because it would allow Ammon to see Shebla in all fields of her personality. He had seen her in happiness, anger, and sadness. Which are the three big types.
Also, Zanita and Kadir will have to join forces with Jali again and step into the story. Because Sunset Pride needs them desperately. And if Moonrise ravaged Sunset, it would only be a little time before they moved onto its allies. Attempting to completely purge the world of it.
I had a plan for how Var, Kyra, Var, and Saber go about with the stone journey. They come back to Kenya to find it not dry---but absolutely flooded. And crocodiles are infesting every nook and cranny of it. They'll have to trudge through flooded plains and find the virtually underwater Ridge Pride camp. When they go into Jali's old cave, they'll find a symbol carved in the wall that only Saber will know. They follow it to a place that is infested with black snakes. An orchard of sorts. A grove. They must climb the trees to avoid the snakes. The stone is buried inside a hollow, dead tree.
They take it back to Sunset so Ramla can tell them how to get to the Talon. Unfortunately they have to take the long way, since Aziza's got hyenas everywhere else. They have to go directly into the heart of Kavis's territory. They must disguise their scent with dung, and use the khat trick.
The Badlands (the name if Kavis's territory) are dead of life. Gray. Bones everywhere. You get the picture. It's inspired by the Elephant Graveyard on the Lion King. So think those kinds of styles.
They eventually make it out of the Badlands and must cut through Dalmaa's dream field. I won't say anything on that yet. Then a clear shot for the Talon.
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| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Wed Feb 26, 2014 12:57 am | |
| A quest, I like it!
At any rate, if Shebla still falls asleep on occasion, Egret can show her what's happening to Ammon on his own personal journey, but there will eventually be a point when Ammon will gain the power to sense spirits watching him, and actually utilize another power he was given to interfere with their ability to observe his movements. This way, his new altered appearance will surprise everyone, including Shebla, when he arrives back at Sunset Pride demanding to know where the Chosen are. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Thu Feb 27, 2014 2:42 am | |
| Excellent! Sounds great. Also, Jali's messengers have gone to Zanita and Kadir now, bringing the urgent news. So just a heads up. Because Aziza will push for her slaves to move into their territories as well. And I was hoping to see more of people like Zanita and Kadir. And, I was thinking if you liked the idea, we could do a scene with Gustave, the crocodile from the early plots. And if so, we could do it ourselves or have Nick come in. Since there will be lots of crocs in Kenya, I'd assume he'd be one of their leaders. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Fri Feb 28, 2014 1:27 am | |
| That's true, but if not, I can introduce a temporary crocodile character of my own, so we don't have to control Nick's guy if he doesn't want to come in.
At any rate, I might as well tell you how I plan to portray Kakra, Atsu, and Omari.
Kakra is going to be a tough girl, she's going to immediately display a willful and stubborn personality that seems at first to make her just like Kyra. However, unlike Kyra, Kakra isn't going to be an emotional sort of person, she's not going to be one for talking about anything personal, similar to Ammon, except she's not going to be so cold that she's not approachable. She's going to get embarrassed and walk away from people if they start going all 'mushy' on her, but she's really going to be just a big softie at heart, fiercely loyal, who would do anything for her friends. She'll also be somewhat simple and straightforward, to the point that she's completely blunt when talking to people. She'll also be completely oblivious as a person, and to the needs, wants, and desires of other people. This means that she'll probably say something that upsets or offends others at times, but overall, she'll be calling things as she sees them, and not just because she's being rude. Her older brothers Atsu and Omari will be constantly watching Kakra to make sure she doesn't do something stupid, but overall, despite being tough on the outside, she's a real sweetheart, deep down, and everybody will eventually grow to love her.
As I said earlier, Kakra's special ability will be fitting for her personality, she's going to have unnaturally great strength, and by the time she's the age during which the Warring Prides plot will take place, she could easily perform feats ranging from pushing (or smashing) boulders out of her way, or cutting down thick, fully-grown trees with a single swipe of her paw. The downside would be that she has a rather crude fighting technique compared to anyone else, there's not really much skill in it, and she'll prefer to just stick with beating down her opponents until they're dead, or they surrender, since she can afford to do it without as great a risk to her life, although she's probably going to get wounded more often, and more severely than others. I'm thinking because of this, she'll heal more quickly than normal, also, which means that injuries that would leave others vulnerable for weeks would only affect her for a few days. Overall, she's going to be that person that desperately needs someone a little more cautious around to keep her from doing something stupid or crazy, because she will have a slight overconfidence in her abilities alone. She's not an idiot, though, she won't make the same exact mistake twice.
Atsu, the middle child, and older brother of Kakra, is going to be incredibly clever, and, just as any older brother should be, very protective of his sister, though he doesn't really think the same about his adoptive brother, Omari, though he loves him just as though they were related by blood. Unlike his father Gamba, Atsu will have the blessing of growing in a full mane, although it will be unusual in appearance, due to his hybrid blood. It won't actually be that long, it'll actually be pretty short, and although a bit darker than the rest of his fur, it'll be streaked through with paler colors, and also have dark streaks where stripes would be present on his neck. The fur of his mane will also be regarded as remarkably soft and fine, and it will make all other manes seem incredibly coarse by comparison. It is possible that his mane is short because the hairs aren't that strong, and might just break off at a certain length. Atsu will be a rather easygoing person, and for the most part, kind and friendly to everyone he meets who doesn't immediately strike him as a threat. He's also, unlike his sister, not above fleeing from a fight if he thinks it's not in his favor, and generally, he won't feel any shame in it, because he'll just see it as common sense to escape death when it's likely to occur if he continues battling his foe (Although if Kakra is present, she'll probably decide to keep fighting, and he won't just abandon her). Regardless, he is fiercely loyal, and will selflessly sacrifice himself if it means defending those he loves and cares about. He also doesn't like pointless fighting, and would prefer to flee, versus battling for no reason, generally loathing the idea of innocent people being harmed. There is also the notable fact that, in this aspect a complete opposite of his sister, he is incredibly sensitive to the feelings of others, and attentive to the needs of the individual, capable of being gentle or harsh, when he needs to be, although he is never pushy, and generally is sympathetic to anyone. It should be noted that despite sometimes preferring to flee from a dangerous situation, he is not a coward, and generally, will give into his curiosity on a regular basis. He is capable of remaining calm in a bad situation.
Just as I stated in the PM, Atsu will have remarkable flexibility, balance, and speed. He will be like a contortionist, in many ways, capable of bending his body in an incredible manner, and having the strength to go into positions that would otherwise be difficult or impossible to sustain for others. He will be able to reach any part of himself with his front claws, making it where nobody can grab any part of him without risk of getting attacked back, and he will also have enough strength and balance to stand on his hind legs, and move in such a bipedal-ish manner with remarkable ease, though he can't do it forever. It presents the advantage of allowing him to tower over others, but it can also be so that he can get more height, if he needs to look over something in his way, without supporting himself on another object. It has a strategic advantage in several indirect ways. Atsu's speed will be immediately noted as his greatest skill. He will be large, like his father, but overall, will have a leaner, less heavily-built form, and deep ribs, which indicate his large heart and lungs. His swiftness will include the endurance to maintain high speeds for extended periods, meaning that he can quickly outrun any other creature in Africa, and even if they have more skill than him in battle, he is capable of defeating them solely because he can strike them fast enough. Regardless, he won't have as much endurance or durability as his sister, he'll generally not have as much strength in his blows, they'll actually be somewhat weak, even compared to other lions, and Atsu isn't capable of lifting as much as others, either. What he has in speed and swiftness, he lacks in regards to sheer power or force.
Omari will be like the silent, mysterious guardian of the two twin siblings. He honestly doesn't say much at all, and prefers to quietly observe everyone else. He is incredibly alert, intelligent, and clever, and generally is regarded as wise beyond his years, seeming the most like Gamba out of all three cubs, despite having absolutely no blood relation whatsoever. Having a genuinely good heart, he immediately defends the weak, and protects those that are hurt in some way, having a selfless side to his nature that likely stems from his own grateful feelings for being rescued when he would have otherwise died. Unlike his father, however, Omari will often not openly state how he intends to assist someone, preferring not to tell, should the error of others ruin it. He doesn't force people to heed his advice, or accept his assistance, unless the occasion is one in which they are in a potentially life-threatening situation, in which case he will display a hot temper, and angrily tell whoever he is helping not to argue with him, as it is not the time, or place. People often don't know how they were helped until Omari has already finished doing so, and afterwards, typically, he will leave before being thanked, not expecting any sort of gratitude. Extremely mature, even at a young age, Omari is seldom playful, and prefers to simply watch others play, rather than engage in it himself.
Omari, naturally incredibly large and strong, despite not being related to Gamba or a Barbary Lion, like Ammon, possesses perception beyond that of any average creature. His sharp eyes can spot things from miles away with precise clarity, and he will generally be able to pick out the smallest of details in a scene, things others wouldn't notice. He can also see in almost complete darkness, and therefore, can find his way with ease through any dark cave, though he is in no way sensitive to bright sunlight. His sense of hearing and smell are likewise remarkable, and he can smell and hear small things from miles away, meaning that if an attack or assault were coming, it is likely for him to either smell the enemy, or hear the sounds of their approaching footsteps. His hearing will be so sharp he can even hear Coglon, who is by all other accounts completely silent when he moves. Omari, due to his own sensitive hearing, will be disturbed by excess noise, and therefore, will be much more difficult to hear if he himself approaches, due to him almost automatically choosing with care where he places his paws as he moves, leading to less sound being produced. As a result, he can come right up to people without them noticing, because he is stealthy, despite his great size.
So, yeah, this is the personalities I have in mind for the three cubs. They'll be fun to mix in with the cubs you're controlling, Dark. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Fri Feb 28, 2014 10:55 pm | |
| Yeah, they will be. I'm excited for the interaction between all of them. They'll be excellent characters an give so many new an fresh opportunities for plots.
I'll pm Nick too and ask him. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sat Mar 01, 2014 4:45 am | |
| Don't forget the Tangle Pride I plan on introducing later. They're not going to be a very huge group, but they'll regard themselves as a pride, despite not all of them being lions, and most of them will actually be a little young, including their leader. Pretty much everyone living in Tangle Cavern is going to be identified as a Chosen Warrior by Ammon, so don't forget all the possible characters introduced from them. I already have several good ideas. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 02, 2014 2:36 am | |
| Ok Vipera, so here's sorta how the battle should go. Ultimately, it is probably the biggest battle we've had. It won't take place in Sunset Pride's immediate camp, but out in the fields and forests outside. I think it would be interesting to describe more of Sunset's territory and make some new territory.
About half of Moonrise is coated in the Deathberries which will cause death about five to ten minutes after inhalation. The death is very slow and excruciatingly painful. Medical specialists should be able to identify it.
Once inhaled, the host will feel dizzy. Soon they will begin to bleed from the eyes and cough and/or vomit blood. Paralysis of the shoulders down will take place. Though they will still feel a searing pain shooting through their entire body. But all limbs and tail, eyes, ears, and any whiskers will twitch uncontrollably. Bleeding of the eyes will continue as well as coughing. Lungs will shut down, and cause the host to suffocate.
The battle will be very long and drawn out. The big cause here is to clear a path for the team that's going to go an get the stone. In the end, Moonrise will retreat. They won't e deaf rated in this battle, because after the stone plot, there will be quite a twist to the story that will be the end.
Also, I think a fifth member could go with the team. Magir would be a good candidate, as she knows much of the events of Ridge Pride and will be able to tell things even Taru wouldn't know about the camp.
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| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 02, 2014 3:05 am | |
| Well, that's how it will work, then. As stated in my last post, all the hyenas from the Nightstone Clan are wearing Khat, which means it's dangerous for enemies to bite them, and the fact is they've disguised the scent of the plant, too. That means it won't be until after several people bite a hyena and suffer the effects.
Another note, if Op doesn't play as Gustave, I can easily introduce another crocodile as a substitute, I'm kind of eager to try my hand at it. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 02, 2014 8:46 pm | |
| He wants to. But I wouldn't see a reason for you not to create a crocodile character. I think it would be interesting to see a few more crocs. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 02, 2014 9:29 pm | |
| Awesome, so I'll introduce a younger female that's solitary, versus one that's living in a group. She'll be a bit of a problem, because she'll have some sort of wicked desire to cause as much trouble as possible, and thanks to the fact that Kenya is now almost underwater from all the rain that came from Ethiopia, she can do so. She probably won't even try to kill the lions, so much as set up traps for them to fall into, and basically make life incredibly difficult. She'll toy with them, and they won't trust her very much, but she'll probably give them little hints of how to get around several obstacles, albeit she'll be intentionally vague, just to annoy them. Perhaps she's just bored and wants to have some fun, but if she wanted to laugh, she has a cruel sense of humor. It'll be a way of making getting to the old pride camp difficult, while at the same time allowing anyone reading the story to have a laugh at the expense of the protagonists. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Mon Mar 03, 2014 4:12 am | |
| Sounds like Gustave, except he would happily kill the lions. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Mon Mar 03, 2014 10:30 pm | |
| Yeah, except I plan for my character to be sort of like a social opposite of Gustave. Gustave is a gigantic male crocodile with a whole ton of other crocodiles that see him as leader. I'm going for making a tiny female that seems to show up out of nowhere, and she's going to be sort of a social outcast, because she's going to have eyes that don't have a lot of color, which would make them sort of red in color. The reason I think I can do it is because I've seen actual cases in the wild where animals weren't albinos, but lacked pigment in their eyes. My prime example, though, is a squirrel that had red eyes, and the truth is the poor little creature seemed to get bullied a lot, everyone would chase him off, and I was just trying to feed him peanuts. I'm getting off-topic, there but what I mean is the 'social outcast' part would likely fit. There's also the fact that being small means my character, who I think I will call Aina, can pretty much sneak up on just about anyone unnoticed, and also, she can probably be considered incredibly swift, because of the fact that she's small.
In a nutshell, Aina will probably be more for comical relief, than anything else, because she's not going to kill anyone, but she's going to make them all miserable. I intend to have Kyra call her a demented little monster at some point in the story. | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Tue Mar 04, 2014 8:38 pm | |
| I like it Vipes:D. I anticipate the introductory post! | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sat Mar 08, 2014 11:18 pm | |
| also, just a note, I have a very cool idea for the nine Ix Lords, but I also have an idea for the Leader of the Ix, overall, who is the strongest of them. Overall, the idea revolves around something sort of similar to how Saber was brought back into a mortal physical form, but it's more twisted and evil in nature, I think it'll sum up the villains quite nicely. I won't go into detail any more unless you want me to spoil it in a PM, but I've gone crazy trying to do character designs. | |
| | | Derkal Transvestite Administrator
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sat Mar 08, 2014 11:29 pm | |
| I wouldn't want you to spoil it. I want to be surprised | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sat Mar 08, 2014 11:35 pm | |
| Okay, just making sure you're okay with it, first, since the bad guys are really going to be challenging to defeat.
At any rate, I've been re-drawing and re-designing all my characters, improving the way the images look, or adding details I missed from earlier, or just simply changing the images to how the characters look now, or will look later. It's difficult, because not all the characters are lions, and I have to figure out how to draw them in a Lion King format, because that's what I use. The only differences are perhaps the shapes of the eyes, and the fact that the part of the eye that is normally yellow in the Lion King is white in my drawings. | |
| | | Derkal Transvestite Administrator
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 12:06 am | |
| That's how I format my PD drawings. Though I've never uploaded them because they're terrible. Though it did draw a decent picture of Snake I may or may not decide to upload. But I would like to see yours and what you can do with them, EDIT: also I'm having Snake's parents visit Kyra in a dream. It seems to be a good way to get out some of the secrets that will greatly affect the plot. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 12:53 am | |
| Don't forget at the same time Shebla should be watching Ammon with Egret.
Dream messengers, they never get old. | |
| | | Derkal Transvestite Administrator
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 1:11 am | |
| Yep. I'll have Shebla go to sleep in my next post. Bit it may only be for a bit, because she is needed while the long battle takes place. But it would be a good idea if one or two medical hyenas or cheetahs arrived to the camp to help out. Shebla would have more time to rest. | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 1:19 am | |
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 2:42 am | |
| I'll probably post tomorrow. I want to make a detailed post and right now my mind is a little sore. But hey, we did good today! Got lots of posts in, | |
| | | ViperaUnion Serpent Master
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| Subject: Re: The Pride Days (OOC) Sun Mar 09, 2014 1:36 pm | |
| Hey, Dark, Shebla's supposed to be asleep. Come on, I already know what's going to happen with Ammon. I'm going crazy because I want to write the post. | |
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